Sunday, March 31, 2013

The Black Knight of Gray Cross


Happy Easter! This comes a few minutes past the 9 a.m. deadline but it's been a rough couple of days and I overslept. So, this continues the time travel storyline and Alice's adventures through the murder hole:

People always talked about one’s life flashing before them as they died but the images she was seeing were not her life. Could not be her life. There were men dressed in armor. Alien sounds assailed her, the clang of metal against metal, grunts, shouts of pain and anger, war cries that curdled the blood. Trumpets heralding victory. Then a man, tall and broad, dressed in black and cobalt blue. He appeared as if through a waterfall, indistinct yet no less a man. He paced the battlements of an ancient castle, sat at the head of a massive table.

11 comments:

  1. India I love it!! Would have loved to be in that dream! Such imagery... love the "appeared as if through a waterfall"! Awesome visual! Love this 8!

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  2. I love the waterfall line too. Great excerpt!

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  3. Scary and descriptions are awesome. Thanks, India. You paint fine word pictures drawing the reader into the scene

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  4. Awesome writing...the staccato sentences, colors, and waterfall imagery. Perfect. Give me more!

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  5. Fantastic descriptions. I particularly love this part: "...but the images she was seeing were not her life. Could not be her life."

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  6. This is a wonderful depiction of dreamlike images, the disjointed sensory impressions. Nice 8!

    Donna

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  7. Wonderful descriptions and imagery, l was in that scene with her, watching through her eyes!

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  8. Great sense of drama and the words paint a wonderful picture. Nicely done. I'm a sucker for a good time travel story so you've definitely got my interest.

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  9. Wow! THat's a very vivid vision. Well done!

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  10. A story after my own heart... Like Arthurian merged with alien--nice! :-) Excellent writing, India--great imagery.

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  11. Difficulty is always easier than death or nothing. But the man through the waterfall: tall, broad, and sits at the head of a massive table sounds like a hero that we all want for our own. Black and cobalt blue, definitely impressive colors to my view.

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